Awesome poem, even without the comments, but those are great, too ("lots of action in a still space"). Oh, how the comments take me back to workshopping, especially the circling of the prepositions. What a thing to focus onin light of the import of the gorgeous, solid words strung from the prepositions--hot-sync bussed surface tension rubber soles dirty maple--much like Cornelius is suspended from certain presuppositions (heh). I love the suspension of him, of his image in the computer. And the last three lines open it up and nail it.
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Awesome poem, even without the comments, but those are great, too ("lots of action in a still space"). Oh, how the comments take me back to workshopping, especially the circling of the prepositions. What a thing to focus on in light of the import of the gorgeous, solid words strung from the prepositions--hot-sync bussed surface tension rubber soles dirty maple--much like Cornelius is suspended from certain presuppositions (heh). I love the suspension of him, of his image in the computer. And the last three lines open it up and nail it.
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